Construction Post: Rough Cut - Feedback

We have made a rough cut and showed an audience for feedback. Here is the video.



We also interviewed one person.



Feedback received:

• The first person view footage of protagonist looking at his phone is focused which doesn't make sense because our visual isn't blurry in real life - so what we're going to do is try make it less prominent that the background is unfocused by adding a cutaway to shorten the blurriness. 
• The ending shouldn't restart back to the beginning but instead just end with the protagonists' eyes closed and dead - we will consider this against our current ending of the life cycle of the protagonists' life restarting as we believe it emphasises the repetitive cycle of people who live this life. 
• The colour of the title at the beginning should be changed - it is currently yellow with a hint of red and we received feedback that it should be a different colour. We will think about what colour it should be and see what is the most suitable against the black and white visuals. 
• The protagonist walking down the stairs - it is too long. We will shorten this in a creative way, such as precision editing.